Five Sentence Fiction – Perseverance

29 Jul

How many people had to persevere in order to build that?! Edinburgh Castle, Scotland

The tension knot that first appeared in her lower back, had worked its way to her shoulders and neck causing her to slouch and invoke an image of a woman much older than herself.

She caught herself releasing heavy sighs for even the most miniscule tasks; a sign that  she was taking on far too much.

A ‘to do’ list lay next to her highlighting her life in point form and stretching out into eternity; a daunting mix of important, urgent and useless tasks that triggered an entire series of wide ranging emotions.

The weight of her responsibilities was tangible and when the tears finally came, she had little resources and energy left to stop them from spilling over the brim of her eyelids and streaking her pink cheeks.

I believe in you, a familiar voice whispered in her ear halting the tears and reminding her that greatness was born from perseverance.

For more information on Five Sentence Fiction, visit Lillie McFerrin’s blog.

15 Responses to “Five Sentence Fiction – Perseverance”

  1. Writing Jobs July 29, 2012 at 12:11 pm #

    That was another excellent post today. You make it look so easy. Thanks so much for sharing. I really enjoyed reading it very much. Have a wonderful day!

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  2. Jo-Anne Teal (@jtvancouver) July 29, 2012 at 4:19 pm #

    And we do believe in you :))
    Well done Angie. A slice of life, easy to relate to, and a reminder for us all to keep going. Hugs! #yourock !!

    • ajjrichmond July 29, 2012 at 5:47 pm #

      Thanks darling! How did you know it was me? LOL :P

  3. Janelle July 29, 2012 at 8:47 pm #

    I hate days like that. But I think this is a great choice as a scene for the prompt word, because what else can you do in times like that than persevere?

    • ajjrichmond July 29, 2012 at 8:51 pm #

      My thoughts exactly. Thanks for the comment :)

  4. Marie Frizelle July 29, 2012 at 11:36 pm #

    I loved it and cannot help but marvel at your mastery of the semicolon. I have yet to do so.

    • ajjrichmond July 30, 2012 at 7:44 am #

      Wow! Thanls a huge compliment Marie! Thank you so much :)

  5. Sandra July 30, 2012 at 1:48 am #

    I felt her weariness. Nice one.

  6. Lizzie Koch July 30, 2012 at 3:53 pm #

    I wish I had a little voice on days like that. Well done on such a real, thoughtful piece. xxx

    • ajjrichmond July 30, 2012 at 3:54 pm #

      Thank you! You can borrow my little voice anytime you like :)

  7. lisashambrook July 30, 2012 at 4:47 pm #

    I related to that so perfectly…we all need those little encouragements at times. Lovely!

  8. Claire August 1, 2012 at 10:18 am #

    Everybody needs a voice like that! Wonderful idea, and great descriptions!

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